Criterion Undocumented 0 Minimal 1 Basic 2 Proficient 3 Advanced 4 Comments

Unacceptable Unacceptable Acceptable Acceptable Acceptable

Idea The statement does Statement Statement Using generally Using sound I see the idea of this
Development not address expresses the logically sound assumptions assumptions and paper, but it is all
the author’s views author’s views develops the and arguments, arguments, the over the place. If
about the purposes about the author’s views based in practical statement logically there is a grand
of education, purposes of about the experience, the develops the author’s connection between
guiding educational education, purposes of statement logically views about the your past experience
principles, guiding education, develops the purposes of and your passion for
understanding of educational guiding author’s views education, guiding education, the paper
learning, and/or the principles, educational about the purposes educational will flow better.
most appropriate understanding principles, of education, principles, Maybe a
strategies for of learning, understanding guiding understanding of rearrangement of the
teaching. The and/or the of learning, educational learning, and/or the paper would be a
statement is most and/or the most principles, most appropriate good change.
incoherent or appropriate appropriate understanding of strategies for
extremely brief or strategies for strategies for learning, and/or teaching. Statement
contains major teaching, but teaching. the most includes sound
logical is ambiguous However, the appropriate ethical or
inconsistencies. or not statement is not strategies for psychological
connected. always consistent teaching. arguments and not
and/or convincing. just practical ones.

Illustrative No illustrative Supporting Examples in Supporting Specific examples Your examples,

Examples examples are examples are support of points examples from the from the writer’s quotes, and
included. inadequate or are relevant but writer’s personal experience, experiences are really
of unclear general or not experience are academic work, or good, but you need to
relevance. based in specific and field experience make the connection
experience. pertinent. illustrate points in a to the topic better for
vivid or memorable them to be relevant.
way.
Quality of The statement is The statement, The statement is The statement is In addition to being The idea of your
Writing very difficult to read though understandable clear, well clear, well paper and your
because of its style, comprehensibl plus two of the organized, free organized, free philosophy of
usage, mechanics, or e, has obvious following: from errors of from errors of education is great,
organization. problems in mechanics and mechanics and but I can tell that as
two of the 1) organized, usage, and written usage, and written you thought of an
following in an appropriate in an appropriate idea you wrote it
areas: style, 2) free from academic style. academic style, the down, not in any
usage and errors of statement: order, so the
mechanics, or mechanics organization needs to
and usage, 1) has a single,
organization. be fixed. And reread
unifying theme
the paper to fix
3) In an appropriate and
grammar errors.
academic style. 2) Is strongly
suggestive of the
writer’s voice.
Additional After you state your
Comments quote and the
beginning of your
philosophy, you
need to add what
you want to teach, I
cannot tell if it is
history or ag or even
something else. Just
fix the organization,
grammar errors, and
the structure of your
paper, and it will
end up being great!
Reviewee: Kris Simmons

Evaluator: Megan Self