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Chapter 2

My parents help me to plan my trip but they told me to do my trip I need to do something Commented [s1]: Past or present?
for the family that was to go and saw my sister and meet her in Peru the restaurant, I Commented [s2]: Wrong word.
understood that my first trip would be Peru to meet my sister in the restaurant but it was
the restaurant name Peru that is on the building were I lived. My parents are friends of Commented [SC3R2]:
the owner of the hotel Hilton because my dad has some of his restaurants in the hotel
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Hilton, my sister and me have a privilege with the hotel Hilton so we could stay in the
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When I was in the Peru´s airport my parents called, they told me that I was late for
meeting my sister but when I get to the restaurant my sister wasn´t there, they told me Commented [s6]: Past or present?
that she was waiting me there but I already look on all the restaurant a my sister wasn´t
there. I talked to my sister by cellphone and we notice that she was in Madrid searching Commented [s7]: Avoid repetition of words. “See” “need”
for me in the restaurant chain of my dad and I was on Peru searching for her. She told me Commented [s8]: Capitalization.
to stay in her home, her home was on the hotel Hilton in a room of the hotel because she
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has all and she pay just a Little for that. My sister stays in the hotel Hilton but not because
I live there is because I had the keys in Peru, whit me. Commented [s10]: Stay.
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I talk to my parents and they told me that I must have to see my sister so I must go to Commented [s12]: This part is too long.
Madrid and see my sister and stay a day with her. Before I leave to Madrid I decide to do a Please use proper punctuation in order
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trip in Peru because I need to continue searching what I want to study, I decide to go first
to lima where I was but I went to the lLomas De Lucumo , I saw a lots of rocks and people
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walking there having picnics so I sat down for a while and saw all and I did a picnic in there
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with some people that invited me to stay with them and teach them how to draw.
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Then of the Lomas de Lucumo experience in the night I went to Cusco and I stayed in a Commented [s16]: Past or present?
hostel near there because there was not a 5 stars hotel the next day on march the 20 th I Commented [s17]: Things.
went to Cusco , I walked all the day there and saw all and draw many things in one part a
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saw a boy alone named jack and went to him and told him that his fotographs were so
good so we start talking and we become friends, he was on the trip around the world. I Commented [s19]: This part is too long.
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stayed ike a week in Cusco because that place give me a good experience and a felling to separate the ideas.
that I was not alone and that there was a real world not only buildings and cars all around.
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The next week in the morning I wen in a car to Titicaca but that day I was rushing Commented [s21]: Spelling.
because I had a plan to stayed in each part like 3 to 4 days but I stayed much longer time
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in Cusco so now I have just a day to be in Titicaca and a day to be in Arequipa so I saw all Salomé.
in Titicaca, eat and draw, but at night I went to Arequipa and I buy a lot od pretty little
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things. In My flight to Madrid i was arriving to see my sister.
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