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It has recently come to my attention that a computer security problem exists within our
organization. I understand that the problem is twofold in nature:
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Henceforth, you are prohibited from sharing passwords for security reasons that should be
axiomatic. We also must forbid you to use automatic logon files because they empower anyone
to have access to our entire computer system and all company data.
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Enclosed please find a form that you must sign and return to the aforementioned individual,
indicating your acknowledgment of and acquiescence to the procedures described here. Any
computer user whose signed form is not returned will have his personal password invalidated.
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will have his personal password invalidated”
EDIT
TO: All Employees Using HP 5000 Computers
Because your organization is facing a significant problem in computer security, please follow
these two actions to improve the situation:
a. Secure your password. Please do not reveal your password with anyone.
Sharing password is not encourage because some security reasons. By keeping your password
safe, you will help the organization to prevent leaking private information. Moreover, please avoid
using automatic logon procedures because it is unsafe. Despite being timeless and convenient,
automatic logon gives strangers power to access to the entire computer system and company data.
Will you please inform us by signing the attached form and send it back to me confirming that you
are taking this problem seriously and agree to follow the two procedures listed above. We
appreciate your contribution to protect the company private information.