Ella Flaim

Ms. Wilson
English II
Feb 1, 2019

Instructions:
1. Choose ​ONE​ of the stories you read for the Intro to English II assignment:
a. "A Dozen Keychains" by Firoozeh Dumas
b. "By Any Other Name" by Samantha Rama Rau

2. Write a well-constructed SPEPES paragraph in response to the prompt below. You must
CITE EVIDENCE​ from the text to support your response. Be sure to include the title(s)
and author(s) in your answer. You may use your annotations.

Prompt: ​The the people we are surrounded by and the things we go through in life ​change how
we see ourselves.​ In the text, how do social influences and experiences shape the protagonist's
attitude towards herself? (Type your response in the space below).

In​ A Dozen Key Chains ​by Firoozeh Dumas, the speaker won’t take a shower because
there isn’t a door, which causes the speaker to be anxious about her cleanliness and to not fully
experience the camp. In the text the speaker states, “Since I wasn’t going to bathe, I decided to
minimize getting dirty by only participating in arts and crafts.” This shows how the speaker
limited herself and missed out on so much she wanted to do. The speaker also states, “After the
play, I really wanted to bathe, but I simply could not. The idea of any of the mean girls walking in
on me as I took a shower was just too much.” This shows how the speaker’s anxiety ruined her
whole stay at camp as well as making her extremely dirty. In conclusion, the simple fact that the
bathroom didn’t have a door caused the speaker’s anxiety to spiral out of control and cause her
to not bathe for weeks, as well as miss out on activities she was looking forward to.

Proficie Earned Points

Requirements Based on Standards nt? (X) Points Possible
Produce an answer based on the proof you
X
Statement - Student collect.
makes a clear,
Restate the question stem. Mention the name of
straightforward, X 3 3
the book, story, article.
relevant claim
(Standard Wa.9.1.a) Write a specific and detailed claim that reflects the
X
proof you have collected.
Use direct textual proof when possible (direct
Proof - Student X
quotes, or paraphrase from the text)
uses observable
evidence and Choose the proofs that actually prove your 3 3
X
specific details to statement is true. The more specific, the better.
support opinion.
Cite proofs using appropriate formatting (includes X
(Standards W.9.1.b, punctuation)
W.9.1.d)
Explain ​how​ your evidence proves your
Explanation - X
statement, not just ​that​ it proves your statement.
Student uses
critical thinking to Use key words from the statement to connect the 12
X
support evidence proof(s) to the statement. 12 (3 points
and connect it to Anticipate questions your reader might have and each)
the claim. X
answer them. Leave no doubt.
(Standard W.9.1.b)
Use sound reasoning in explanation X
Synthesis - Student Restate your main point(s) using different words
X
summarizes with the same meaning.
argument and, if
Remind your reader of your strongest proofs X 2 3
necessary, offers
extension. Why is your argument important to understanding
(Standard W.9.1.e) the text?
Utilize transition words/phrases to aid organization X

Transitions/Organiz Vary sentence structure (simple, compound,

X
ation/ complex)
Formatting/Style/To Use formal language to convey clear ideas (no 2 2
ne slang) Uses strong verbs and adjectives that make X
(Standards W.9.1.a, your argument clearer.
W.9.1.c, W.9.1.d)
Present an objective argument (keep your
X
emotions/ feelings out of it)
Conventions: Avoid run-ons, comma splices, and fragments X
Grammar, Spelling,
Capitalization, and 2 2
Punctuation X
(Standard L.9.2) Avoid capitalization and spelling errors

Total: 24 25