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There
are
two
ways
to
make
your
essay
more
concise,
or
shorter
and
easier
to
read.
Large scale -‐ These can be used to shorten or eliminate sentences and paragraphs.
1.
Remember
your
thesis
statement.
Ask
yourself
the
same
question:
Is
this
helping
prove
my
thesis?
Every
sentence
and
every
paragraph
must
have
a
purpose.
If
not,
2.
Get
rid
of
sentences,
or
even
paragraphs,
that
say
the
same
thing
twice.
Ask
yourself
this
question:
Did
I
already
say
this
before?
Saying
the
same
thing
two,
three
or
four
times
is
NOT
the
best
way
to
add
emphasis.
Assume
your
reader
can
understand
what
you
are
writing.
Then
add
detail
or
use
examples
for
emphasis.
3.
Eliminate
the
obvious.
If
you
have
a
sentence
that
says:
Global
warming
is
making
the
Earth
hotter
the
reader’s
reaction
is
going
to
be
“no
kidding?”
There
are
two
ways
to
solve
this.
Delete
is
one.
The
other
is
to
go
back
and
add
more
information:
Global
warming
is
making
the
Earth
hotter
by
1
degree
every
20
years.
Small scale – using fewer words to say the same thing
1. Eliminate
repetitive
pairs:
true
and
accurate;
hopes
and
dreams;
full
and
complete;
each
and
every;
whole
entire;
always
and
forever;
and
many
others.
For
example:
The
illness
prevented
me
from
achieving
all
my
hopes
and
dreams.
No
need
for
“hopes
and”
in
that
sentence.
Dreams
is
enough.
2. Change
sentences
from
passive
voice
to
active
voice.
Almost
all
sentences
in
English
are
stronger
in
active
voice.
The
subject
is
usually
the
most
important
thing
in
the
sentence
and
should
be
identified
first.
It
is
a
more
direct
way
of
giving
information.
The
formation
of
the
passive
voice,
with
using
the
“to
be
verb+participle+by”
format
is
more
complex.
3. Many
adverbs,
especially
qualifiers,
can
go.
No
need
to
say:
He
ran
quickly
to
the
store.
Running
is
usually
quick.
He
ran
to
the
store
is
enough,
especially
in
academic
writing.
A
list
of
qualifiers
that
are
rarely
necessary:
actually,
really,
basically,
probably,
very,
definitely,
somewhat,
kind
of,
extremely,
practically
4. Reduce
prepositional
phrases.
Don’t
eliminate
them,
but
too
many
get
in
the
way.
These
are
phrases
that
begin
with
“in,
over,
through,
on,
for,
at.”
If
you
can
take
it
out
and
the
sentence
doesn’t
change
its
meaning,
ask
yourself
if
you
really
need
it.
5. Express
negative
ideas
as
positive
ones.
This
is
not
a
philosophical
argument
–
for
whatever
reason
in
English
we
often
use
two
extra
words
for
negatives.
6. Removing
“it
is”
“it
has”
or
“this
is
because”
in
the
middle
of
sentences
or
at
the
beginning
of
sentences.
Often
you
can
just
combine
two
sentences.
For
example:
Popayan
is
a
beautiful
city.
This
is
because
it
has
many
wonderful
churches
can
be
changed
to
Popayan
is
a
beautiful
city
because
of
its
many
wonderful
churches.
Exercise
1:
Replace
the
following
with
a
single
word.