UPM-CALC/SEM2/2017-18/CEL2106/WORKSHEET/WEEK5

Name: CHONG CHUN WENG. Group: 63

Worksheet Week 5

This is an individual activity for you to carry out. The activities should be completed and
submitted on EDMODO by the due date.

A. Revise the highlighted sentences in the job application letter below by using “You”
view language.

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1. Your Marketing and Sales Leadership Training Internship will get an individual well

fitted into the team through the opportunity given by reading this introduction.

2. You will get an employee of primary liaison on a new Bond trading software program

linking the inventories of over 70 Brokers and Dealers with experience working for

Morgan Stanley.

3. An individual in Goldman Sachs’s Analyst Program who worked on their Institutional

Equities trading desk in a middle office role will also be acquired by you.

4. You will get an employee that thrives in a fast paced, results driven environment.

5. The time you have taken to review this resume has ensured that you thoroughly

understand the excellent skills and background of the employee that you will be

getting.

B. Revise the sentences below by using “You” view and persuasive language.

1. I have considerable experience working within environments where customer service is

important.

You will have an employee with considerable experience in customer service which is

important.

2. I understand how important customer service is to the continued success of any

business and I am personally very committed to delivering outstanding service.

You will acquire an individual that understands the importance of customer service and

have the commitment to deliver outstanding service to ensure the continuous success

of the company.

3. I feel that the combination of my engineering expertise and people skills could be really
valuable within the corporate environment as I understand both the technical
challenges of the energy sector and the business impact of these skills.

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An individual with expertise in engineering combined with people skills that understand

both the technical challenges of the energy sector and the business impact of these

skills will be acquired by you which can be valuable within the corporate environment.

4. Throughout my life I have demonstrated strong leadership abilities and a willingness to

get involved and make things happen.

You will gain an employee that can lead the company and is willing to go any lengths to

achieve the goal.

5. I am committed and tenacious, not only in the sporting arena where I have regularly
represented both my university first team and my country at tennis, but also in my
academic work where I have consistently performed in the top quarter of my course.

You will acquire an individual that is committed and tenacious as a top representative

in every aspect of life with consistent top performance in every field.

C. Rewrite this job application letter using suitable tenses.

September 20, 2015

Ms. Ellie Valley

Senior Manager
Wallaby Yogurt Company

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Name: CHONG CHUN WENG. Group: 63

110 Mezzetta Court

American Canyon, CA 94503

Dear Ms. Wells:

I am a graduate of Harvard University and am writing to apply for the Manager in Training
opportunity at the Wallaby Yogurt Company posted in Harvard’s Crimson Careers database.
I am very interested in the field of marketing and would welcome the opportunity to
contribute my research, writing skills, and experience to your growing business.

I am excited about Wallaby’s commitment to organic, all-natural ingredients in its products.

As a varsity field hockey player, I am very aware of the importance of healthy food as the
foundation for a healthy life. Your emphasis on “learning by doing and leading by serving” is
also consistent with the training I received as an athlete. Whether on the field learning new
drills in the worst weather conditions or patiently working with a new team member, I was
most fulfilled when contributing to the team effort.

In addition to my concentration in History, I had completed my coursework in Economics. My

academic work had strengthened my research and writing skills as well as my understanding
of the economics of business growth and development. Working with Harvard
Undergraduate Women in Business (WIB) over the last two years gave me the experience
and confidence to work in a dynamic, fast-paced organization where learning quickly and
pitching in are instrumental to success. As a member of the Executive Committee, for
example, I manage campus advertising campaigns that increased overall membership and
attracted more than 500 students from 12 different schools to our annual Intercollegiate Fall
Conference.

Thank you for your consideration. I am looking forward to the opportunity to speak with you
in person about my interest in this position.

Sincerely,

Jane Smith