I think that buying things with credit cards instead of cash is a good idea.

Using credit cards for shopping is easier than using cash.

Moreover, it helps me a lot when I need to pay bills and purchase something.

Three days ago, I was in the same situation that I couldn't buy an item because I only had a few
money left in my wallet.

For these reasons, I think that people should use credit cards instead of cash to pay bills.
 Writing Rublic
Teacher's name Jean
Essay No: 2-F-26
Essay Words 74
Need to improve Fair Average Good work Excellent

4 6 8 10
Spelling 2
6 to 7 mistake 4 to 5 mistake 1to 3 mistakes no mistake

Sentences/ 4 6 8 10
2
Grammar 6 to 7 mistake 4 to 5 mistake 1to 3 mistakes no mistake

Organization/
2 4 6 8 10
Content

2 10
4 6
Target Words Less than 100 words
70-79 words 80-99 words
40 words and more

Handwriting
2 4 6 8 10
and Neatness

Total Score
36
Comments

Instead of writing (I have two reasons), just provide an overview of the body.
Please do not forget to capitalize a word after a period (punctuation mark).
Be mindful in using punctuation marks when writing an essay because they play
an important role to organize your writing. They are used to create sense, clarity and
stress in sentences.
I think it is a good idea. There are reasons for this.

Using credit cards is very convenient. We don't have to bring a lot of coins

because we can buy and pay bills in the supermarket,

department stores and even when we book flights and hotel rooms.

Moreover, my mother can quickly check my credit card statement to see all of my
transactions.
 Writing Rublic
Teacher's name Jean
Essay No: 3-A-9
Essay Words 77
Need to improve Fair Average Good work Excellent

4 6 8 10
Spelling 2
6 to 7 mistake 4 to 5 mistake 1to 3 mistakes no mistake

Sentences/ 4 6 8 10
2
Grammar 6 to 7 mistake 4 to 5 mistake 1to 3 mistakes no mistake

Organization/
2 4 6 8 10
Content

2 10
4 6
Target Words Less than 100 words
70-79 words 80-99 words
40 words and more

Handwriting
2 4 6 8 10
and Neatness

Total Score 32
Comments

Instead of writing (There are two reasons for this), just provide an overview of the body.
Usage of contraction (e.g can't, don't) are considered informal in academic writing.
When it comes to academic writing, Title or the Prompt is important,
please do not forget to write it because it allows the reader to know the main topic.
Please be mindful of the spelling of department, you don't say "depart" only because
it will be a different word and it is an action verb that means "leave".
The complete word will be "department store". It means a large store stocking many
varieties of goods in different departments.
You also misspelled the word "of". Avoid adding an s.
I think that buying things with credit cards instead of cash is a good idea.

A credit card is more convenient to use than cash.

There's a big risk to bring such a huge amount of money whenever we go somewhere.

Moreover, credit cards are safer than cash. If I lost money in my wallet I would

not able to find it anymore. However if I have a credit card I would not have a

big problem because I can use it to pay bills and buy something for myself.
 Writing Rublic
Teacher's name Jean
Essay No: 3-C-34
Essay Words 98
Need to improve Fair Average Good work Excellent

4 6 8 10
Spelling 2
6 to 7 mistake 4 to 5 mistake 1to 3 mistakes no mistake

Sentences/ 4 6 8 10
2
Grammar 6 to 7 mistake 4 to 5 mistake 1to 3 mistakes no mistake

Organization/
2 4 6 8 10
Content

2 10
4 6
Target Words Less than 100 words
70-79 words 80-99 words
40 words and more

Handwriting
2 4 6 8 10
and Neatness

Total Score 32
Comments

Please review subject verb agreement (usage of singular and plural form of verb).
Because is used as a conjunction to make complex sentence.
Starting because is not being used in academic setup.
Please be mindful of the spelling of cards.
When it comes to handwriting, better control the way you write the letters and spaces.
Kindly utilize your spaces between words and avoid skipping the next line
when starting a new paragraph.