1. clear enough intro? Yes. You could add more, but it is fine.

2. Is this paragraph too incoherent? 3. Muggles buying wand sentence; yay or nay? Yay, but it is run on. You could say a child unacquainte d with the true wizarding world

4. Religious and Twilight sentence; yay or nay? Yay, but maybe more detail about it.

For the Alley description, you I believe in the beauty of reader participation. I dont mean should break it up. Maybe tell simply annotating a text or reflecting on a work after reading; I mean about the alley and then completely letting go and immersing oneself in the world created in mention that during your visit a book. One literary world that is especially prone to reader your sister cried. captivation is that of Harry Potter. Description+upon my families The world that so fascinated millions of readers has become entry into the magical world.. so popular that it has not only been made into a magnificent reality in film, but also, in the form of a theme park. Universal Studios, as part of the Islands of Adventure, recreated various elements of the wizarding world that J.K. Rowling created. Upon my first visit to the park with my family, once the crooked street of Diagon Alley, with its perfectly crooked chimneys and walls scuffed with such careful precision, came into view, my sister, a huge fan, could not contain her excitement. She began to cry. Now, to any normal person, this may seem absurd, but after the initial laughs and jokes are made it is actually quite reasonable and even inspiring why the sight had such an overwhelming effect on her. Christopher Morley said, When you sell a man a book you don't sell him just 12 ounces of paper and ink and glue - you sell him a whole new life. My sister opened up the gate and crossed the threshold into the magical world of Harry Potter at the most opportune age: she was 11 (the same age as Harry when he was first introduced to the magical world that he inhabits for the rest of the series) when the first Harry Potter book was released. This element allowed my sister to relate to that character and live vicariously through him as Distracti they journeyed through Hogwarts together. So when my sister broke down in a crowd of ng. muggles trying to push past so that they could buy a $30 wand for a child whos Maybe knowledge of the Wizarding World came from a movie or two, she was, for the moment, reword in a sublime realm; she was living a dream that she had lived hundreds of times in her head. Forgive the pun, but it is the only word I can think of that accurately describes the experience: it was MAGICAL! The world of Harry Potter is not the only literary world in which a reader can immerse oneself; on two opposite ends of the literary spectrum, someone can be a devout Minus the reader of a religious text or the Twilight series (yes, even Twilight). The beauty of even reading is not dependent on the book, but, more importantly, how the reader is impacted twilight part from the book. Many scoff at fanatics of fictional books, saying that their affinity is a I like that waste because it is make-believe. Rowling wrote, through the wise medium of part! If you Dumbledore, Of course it is happening inside your headbut why on earth should that have enough mean that it is not real? The world in ones head is equally important as the tangible space you world. That is why I believe in the beauty of reading to explore both worlds. could stretch it instead of just having a parenthetica l comment.