Do Now Task

Take out your annotated article

(which you completed for homework).
1. Put a star next to the points that
you think you could develop and
make inferences from.
2.Put a circle around any supporting
detail you could use.

Wednesday 15th April

Question 1: Development and Detail
how you feel about the discovery of the truth
about the monster
Just then, a bubbling began astern and the boat started
to move. We barely had time to hang on to its topside,
which emerged about 80 centimetres above water. It was
imperative to make contact with whatever beings were
confined inside the machine. I searched its surface for
an opening, but the lines of rivets were straight and
uniform. We would have to wait for daylight to find some
way of getting inside this underwater boat, and if it made
a dive, we were done for!

Lets look for detail and develop our ideas

together.

Class Example: First Bullet Point

Facts and events leading to being on board the submarine:
attacked/rammed
thrown/jumped overboard by collision [det. (initially think) ship hit by the
'tusks' of a monstrous creature, at least three men fell overboard, Ned
lands on monster straight away] [dev. all three lucky/might have
drowned]
tried swimming/not possible to catch ship as it disappeared [det. weighed
down by water-logged clothes/sinking]
found his friend [poss. dev first lucky break]
shared swimming/worked together stayed afloat/saved energy [dev.
couldnt have done it alone]
received answer to calls for help
couldnt go on sinking again/exhausted [det. swallowed seawater, dev.
Nearly drowned/cramps]
saved by Ned/hauled onto surface of monster/sub by Ned
rode on top of monster/sub all night (det. speed, hanging on to ring)
taken below deck/into sub at daylight (8 crew, violence, noises before)

Pair Task: Development and Detail

Now, using the evidence

below, come up with your
own development and
detail for the second
bullet point. Complete
these in your table.

how you feel about the discovery of the truth

about the monster

how you feel about the discovery of the truth

about the monster

Evidence

Planning

Evidence

Planning

I hoisted myself to
the summit of this
half-submerged
creature that was
serving as our
refuge.
I tested it with my
foot.

Development:

I hoisted myself to
the summit of this
half-submerged
creature that was
serving as our
refuge.
I tested it with my
foot.

Development:

This animal, this

monster, this
natural phenomenon
that had puzzled the
whole scientific
world, that had
muddled and misled
the minds of sailors,
was an even more
astonishing one
made by the hand of
The
man! blackish back
supporting me was
smooth and polished
with no overlapping
scales.
We would have to
wait for daylight to
find some way of
getting inside this
underwater boat,
and if it made a dive,

Detail (can find from outside this

quotation):

This animal, this

monster, this
natural phenomenon
that had puzzled the
whole scientific
world, that had
muddled and misled
the minds of sailors,
was an even more
astonishing one
made by the hand of
The
man! blackish back
supporting me was
smooth and polished
with no overlapping
scales.
We would have to
wait for daylight to
find some way of
getting inside this
underwater boat,
and if it made a dive,

Detail (can find from outside this

quotation):

Development:

Development:

Development:

Development:

Detail:

Development:

Development:

Development:

Development:

Detail:

Pair Task: Write up bullet point 2

Advice from the examiner:
The second bullet allowed them to infer the professors
personal response to the shocking discovery through a full
exploration of his feelings
Middle-range responses made reasonable use of the passage,
with some attempt at own words, but tended to stick closely
to the events and ideas in the passage, and to present them in
the same order as in the passage, often using some of the
same words
Opportunities were also missed for the development of ideas
and the drawing of conclusions in bullet 2. For example, the
professors reaction to the truth about the monster would
be limited to shock and fear, rather than curiosity about its
structure or amazement at its design.

Homework
Write up bullet point 3 for tomorrow.
You should then have a full response.

Plenary

What the examiner said about

bullet point 3:

the third to develop their ideas on the possible

threats or advantages posed by the submarine and its
captain. The best responses firmly linked their ideas
for the third bullet to details in the passage: the
violence of the collision with the ship, the rough
handling of the sailors and professor by the
submarines crew, and the secret existence of the
vessel are some examples of details used to support
the notion that the submarine may be used for
criminal activities in the future.