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1.Use Active Voice Frequently

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Modification of the heuristics was
made by Lacksonen and Enscore
(1993) to solve the dynamic layout
problem.

: Lacksonen and
Enscore(1993) modified the
heuristics to solve the dynamic
layout problem.
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Precise measurement of neural
networks by practitioners is a
heavy emphasis of computer vision
systems.

: Computer vision
systems heavily emphasize that
practitioners precisely measure
neural networks .
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The manager can be assisted by
the proposed model so that the
order size can be precisely
determined.

: The proposed model
can assist the manager in
precisely determining the order
size.


2. Use Verbs Instead of Nouns

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Difficulty is encountered in
explanation of the method to
inexperienced engineers owing to
its computational complexity.

: Explaining the method
to inexperienced engineers is
difficult owing to its
computational complexity.
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Knowledge of how the variables
are distributed is not required by
novice engineers

: Novice engineers do not
need to know how the variables
are distributed.
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Not only is the variability of the
control factors considered by the
proposed procedure, but
implementation of related tasks is
performed.
: In addition to
considering the variability of the
control factors, the proposed
procedure implements related
tasks.

3. Create Strong Verbs



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is, are, was, were, has, give, make,
come, take


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The guideline makes it specific that
all parties will be notified by the
proper authorities when a problem
arises.

: The guideline specifies
that the proper authorities will
notify all parties when a problem
arises.
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The different groups have to reach
an agreement on how to make an
adjustment of the figures.

: The different groups
must agree on how to adjust the
figures.


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The machine operator conducts
transportation of the auto parts to
the assembly line.

: The machine operator
transports the auto parts to the
assembly line.




4. Avoid Overusing Sentences
that Begin with It and There
It There

It There

It
It is

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There can be little doubt that ink jet
printers have a higher per-page
cost than laser printers.

: Ink jet printers
undoubtedly have a higher per-
page cost than laser printers.
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It is important to develop a more
effective approach to solve the
complicated problem.

: A more effective
approach must be developed to
solve the complicated problem.
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There is increasing evidence that
supports the role of protein in
prolonging life.

: Increasing evidence
supports the role of protein in
prolonging life.
5. Delete Redundant and
Needless Phrases










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It is recommended by us that the
trackball be selected on the
occasion of purchasing a user
interface device of this type.

: We recommend
selecting the trackball when
purchasing a user interface
device of this type.
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The trackball is deficient of the
mobility that a mouse has despite
the fact that the trackball requires
less hand movement than the
mouse.

: The trackball lacks the
mobility of a mouse although
the former requires less hand
movement than the latter.

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The web browser in all cases gives
consideration to the user's needs
in a situation in which he or she is
away from the office.

: The web browser always
considers the user's needs
when he or she is away from the
office.

1. Ensure subject and verb
agreement

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Either the collected data set or two
additional outputs was used to
construct a neural network model.

: Either the collected data
set or two additional outputs
were used to construct a neural
network model.


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The research assistant and the
doctoral candidate are the same
person.

: The research assistant
and the doctoral candidate is the
same person.


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Physics make most first year
doctoral students nervous.

: Physics makes most
first year doctoral students
nervous.


2. Ensure that pronoun
references are clear in meaning






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When a decision reaches the final
stage, it must be implemented
promptly.

: When reaching the final
stage, a decision must be
implemented promptly.

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No adjustment factors exist if (C1)
is violated, which implies that the
transformation approach can be
implemented.

: The fact that no
adjustment factors exist if (C1)
is violated implies that the
transformation approach can be
implemented.


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Driving a car and talking on a
cellular phone at the same time is
dangerous; this could cause an
accident.

: Driving a car and talking
on a cellular phone at the same
time is dangerous; this habit
could cause an accident.




3. Create sentences parallel in
structure and meaning




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The numerical example
concentrates mainly on illustration
of the cases derived in the
previous section and
demonstrating the effectiveness of
the proposed model.
: The numerical
example illustrates the
cases derived in the
previous section and
demonstrates the
effectiveness of the
proposed model.


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The committee made a decision to
set a new agenda and that the
meeting should be adjourned.

: The committee decided
to set a new agenda and adjourn
the meeting.


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The robust design focuses not only
on collecting data accumulated
from the designed experiment, but
also that the results obtained by
using Taguchi's two-step
procedure are compared.
: The robust
design focuses not only
on collecting data
accumulated from the
designed experiment, but
also on comparing the
results obtained by using
Taguchi's two-step
procedure.


4. Eliminate modifier problems




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To keep in shape, exercise is a
must for an athlete.

: An athlete must exercise
to keep in shape.


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When an engineer, customer
satisfaction should be attempted.

: An engineer should
attempt to satisfy the customer.


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After simulating a real environment,
a consensus was reached.

: After the researchers
simulated a real environment, a
consensus was reached.


5. Double check for faulty
comparisons and omissions

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Our algorithm is more accurate
with respect to computational time.

: Our algorithm is more
accurate than conventional ones
with respect to computational
time.


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The chemistry department
cooperates with local industry
more than their department.

: The chemistry
department cooperates with
local industry more than their
department does.


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The novel material is as strong, if
not stronger than, available ones.

: The novel material is as
strong as, if not stronger than,
available ones.

6. Avoid unnecessary shifts in
a sentence




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Communicators must share a
common language or protocol so
that we can easily understand
each other.

: Communicators must
share a common language or
protocol so that they can easily
understand each other.



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A computer mouse needs some
available workspace and even the
beginning user can operate them
with very little difficulty.

: A computer mouse
needs some available
workspace and even the
beginning user can operate one
with very little difficulty.

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Execute the program commands
and the iteration steps must be
repeated.

: Execute the program
commands and repeat the
iteration steps.


7. Combine conciseness and
clarity



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